TSUKIKO's Techniques

[miharu]

TsumeOokami no Kage – “shadow Wolf Claw”
The TsumeOokami no Kage relys entirely on the chakra control of the user, it requires the user to channel a great deal of chakra to their hands, so much so that the chakra becomes visible foming into Claws. it can cut into whatever it touches.

Shukuchi - "Reduced Earth"
This is the fastest technique ever created. It is named reduced earth because it looks like magic was used to close the distance. It moves so fast that the eye almost cannot be seen. The work of the legs is so powerful that the ground gets destroyed everywhere you move. The down side is that the longer you use it the more likely your legs will sustain damage.

[Hatake Hiroshi]

Ok! Let's get started!

Tsume Ookami no Kage: This technique sounds pretty solid so far. You've pointed out that it takes immense amounts of chakra and that chakra control is the essential element to make the technique work properly. You might want to include any side-effects of using the technique. Since so much chakra is used, how many times can the jutsu be used in succession? Everything sounds pretty good to me, however, to say that it can cut into whatever it touches is pushing it a bit. Having a technique that can pretty much cancel out/kill anything/anyone, is a bit on the god-moddish side. You should add some limits. How does the technique work against metallic weapons like swords, kunai and shuriken? Against organics? Adding specifics such as these will help you get your jutsu get approved sooner.

Shukuchi: This technique most definitely needs some toning down. I'll walk you through it step-by-step, explaining what needs to be tweaked.

1. "This is the fastest technique ever created. . . It moves so fast that the eye almost cannot be seen." This absolutely needs to be changed. There is no possible way that your character has the "fastest technique ever". Instead, maybe "This is the fastest of Tsukiko's techniques. It moves so fast that it is almost undetectable by an untrained eye." That way, it would apply to the lower ranking ninja who would not have had much experience in detecting such techniques. Jounin, possibly some more experienced Chuunin, and other high-ranking shinobi such as ANBU, would have an easier time seeing it. Keep in mind, it is all in how you word things. You may not intend for it to sound so godmoddishly powerful, but it comes across that way.

2. It is named Reduced Earth because it looks like magic was used to close the distance. The description of how this technique actually closes distances needs to be more in-depth. How exactly does it work?

3. The work of the legs is so powerful that the ground gets destroyed everywhere you move. The down side is that the longer you use it the more likely your legs will sustain damage. This is very good! It describes the effect of the technique on the surroundings and the possible consequences it has on the user. However, you might want to include exactly how long this technique can be in use, and how much chakra and chakra control it takes to execute properly.

That is all I can really think of to tell you. Once you've revised the techniques, you can edit your post with them, but please make sure to let us know that you have edited the post. If you have any questions, please ask.

[miharu]

TsumeOokami no Kage – “shadow Wolf Claw”
The TsumeOokami no Kage relys entirely on the chakra control of the user, it requires the user to channel a great deal of chakra to their hands, so much so that the chakra becomes visible foming into Claws. it can cut like a knife.

Shukuchi is not my technique
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[Hatake Hiroshi]

Thanks for clarifying the first technique, however, I regret to inform you that your second technique, Shukuchi will not be allowed. Period. Since the technique is not yours, you will not be permitted to use it. All techniques need to be entirely original, no ifs, ands, or buts about it. you are more than welcome to base techniques off of other things, but you need to make them your own... completely.

I would be glad to help you develop some ideas if you like, but I also recommend trying to finish up most of your character's biography first. That way, you have a good deal of stuff to work with... like chakra type, family history, personality, etc...

[miharu]

What if I do this?

hurricane step? (I need a name)
This technique was created by Tsukiko to be the fastest ever. By channeling chakra to key parts of the legs and feet, it allows the user to move so fast that they become almost undetectable to the eye. The work of the legs is so powerful that the ground gets destroyed everywhere you move. The down side is that the longer you use it the more likely your legs will sustain damage. Because she’s been working most of her life training to perfect this technique she is able to use it far longer then most.

TsumeOokami no Kage – “shadow Wolf Claw”
The TsumeOokami no Kage was created when Tsukiko was perfecting the hurricane step. it was originally met to help her turn when in high speed by digging into the ground, but soon discovered it had more then one Appalachian. TsumeOokami no Kage relys entirely on the chakra control of the user, it requires the user to channel a great deal of chakra to their hands, so much so that the chakra becomes visible foming into Claws. it can cut like a knife.

[Tensei Kaori]

Hello again. I must say, for the most part I'm very happy with the progress you've made. As far as I'm concerned, the Tsume Ookami technique is perfectly acceptable now. You specified its limitation nicely, and I like that you added a description of why it was made. Good job!

However, I must say that, once and for all, your first technique will not be permitted, as Hatake Hiroshi already pointed out. It's still the same technique, name change or not. The only non-original techniques allowed in our IF are certain techniques from the Naruto universe: the basics, such as Bunshin or Henge, and clan-specific techniques when a character is from a canon clan. Please come up with something else.

Thanks again for your patience in working together with us!

[miharu]

Can you please help me create a Technique that focuses on speed?

[Hatake Hiroshi]

I would love to help you think of some techniques, but to be very honest with you, it is very difficult to do so when you don't have your character completely fleshed out. After all, it is the character itself that makes the technique(s), not the other way around. A character's technique(s) is/are based on one or two, or a combination of several different factors.

1. What is your character's chakra type? That's a HUGE factor in creating techniques. A lightning user is not going to be creating fire-based jutsu, a fire user is not going to have water-based jutsu, etc...

2. What is your character's history? Does your character come from a family that has studied a certain art? Do they come from a family that is known to have one particular chakra type? Were they influenced by their family's culture or traditions? What about events in their past? Goals? Were they influenced by other family members? You get the idea.

3. What about their personality? I know this doesn't sound like a very likely factor, but sometimes it can play a part. For example, if a character has a really out there personality and loves making their mark, they may have only one or two techniques, but they pack a wallop! Or perhaps you have a character that is not that interested in letting every ounce of chakra they have out... They might rely more on smaller, discreet techniques in combination with taijutsu.

4. Personal fighting style? Do they prefer close- or long-range combat? Maybe a combination of the two without being stronger in one than the other? If your character prefers long range combat, they might have techniques that involve projectiles of some sort. If your character prefers close range combat, they might have techniques that put them close to or in contact with an opponent's body.

Also, try to remember, just because you are creating a shinobi character, it doesn't mean you have to be the fastest. I, personally, have characters that are more on the slow side, but make up for it in other areas and with family techniques that allow them to not be hindered by their physical limits. I strongly urge you to read through the Approved Bios and then the Approved Jutsu, and even the Clan Information boards. I guarantee you that most of, if not all of, the techniques you see that have been approved and are well-written, have come AFTER the creator's characters have been completed and are derived from the factors I described to you, as well as others. Once you have completed your character, or at least 80% of it, I would be glad to help you come up with some techniques.

[miharu]

in other words
character first then jutsu
got it

but to answer 2 of your questions
1 wind
4 close-range

[Hatake Hiroshi]

Yes, character first, then jutsu. Thanks for answering a couple of the questions. I appreciate your response. ^_^ I can't wait to see how your character comes out. Then we can get to work on jutsu.