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[Samurai Hatana]

Name:
Samurai “Biyou” Hatana
Samurai’s name is an odd one and immediately calls attention to itself, but for starters it is not spoken how it is spelled. The correct pronunciation is “Sa-mei-rei”, not the same as the warriors. This comes from the root Samu, more over Burossamu, which means to Bloom or to be pretty like a flower. Biyou is a nickname her mother calls her and quite obviously means beautiful.

Alias(s):
Biyou - Given to her by her mother.
Sa-Sa - The name her old teammates called her. Also the name she introduces herself by, informally of course.

Age:
Fifteen

Gender:
Female

Rank:
Genin
Academy student graduates. They demonstrated the ability to pass and are proficient at basic techniques, such as Bunshin no Jutsu. They are assigned to a Jounin, usually three Genin to each Jounin. They are then allowed to do mundane and boring tasks, such as weeding, walking a rich man's dogs or finding a fat, rich woman's cat who had reason to flee it's master. Sa-Sa is getting older for a Genin, though more explanations are given throughout her skill level is more along that of a Chuunins.

Appearance:
Sa-Sa is a Sakura in the Narutoverse, in that I mean she has a look and coloration to her only possible in an Anime. Coming in at five foot seven Sa-Sa is neither small nor tall but completely average in height, given her age it’s likely this will be roughly her final height. Her skin is very fair, an oddity for a Suna-nin since it’s a well-known fact they tend to be dark. It doesn’t seem to be from lack of exposure however as she gets plenty of time outside, she simply seems to have skin that will not tan for her life, a trait she gained from her mother. However if there was a perfect cute girl in existence, Sa-Sa would be her and her skin is no different, it almost has an inner luminescence to it, an ethereal quality of unmatched perfection and yet at the same time she does not appear obscenely bright, as if the gods of balance decided to balance her perfectly. This matches perfectly with her hair, which is bright silver and comes to just below her shoulders as she never bundles it though she has been known to put bows in it.

This leads to her face which is heart shaped though without a sharp chin. As mentioned her skin is fair but her cheeks always seem to have a little bit more of a blush tone to them. Her eyes are of a round shape and a light pink color, they always have a soft look to them and never seem to be angry. This is added to by her small mouth always being locked in a smile, even when she is angry all these factors thrown together give Sa-Sa a very docile look and its often hard to take her seriously in battle. She is rather thin and her face is no different with an almost child like build to it though that is just a trick from her size since she lost all of her baby fat long ago. However on the rare occasion when she pouts she actually looks older for some reason, perhaps because her face droops a bit giving her a more worn look, just an interesting fact. Dropping from her head to her neck she had a mid-length neck with a small diameter that breaks into a narrow shoulder line, not broad in the least.

Most of her upper body fits the skinny and almost too perfect trend, the only thing of mention is that she is not…um…well equipped. That is to say she has no real bust in comparison to the titans like Tsuande in the Narutoverse, of course that is not to suggest she is non-existent, she just wont be turning heads in that regard. She has no real arm strength in a fight and it shows, they have no visible muscle mass and little that can’t be seen either, they are however long and slender, perfect for the precise nature of forming seals which she does with great speed. She happens to paint her nails (as well as her toenails when we get to them a kind of perfect white color). Around the tummy line she is rather defined though, she isn’t packing a massive muscle of doom but its obvious shes put some work into defining this area especially since its helpful in performing acrobatics. It is especially defined since just below it breaks into her hips which expand a bit giving her the hourglass figure (to some extent, not bulging) that most girls would die for. We drop into her legs which are long in comparison to her body, they also happen to be the built part of her body. Not in that “I’m going to be in Iron Woman” way but its obvious that if she was going into a taijutsu fight she would likely rely on footwork, its mildly amusing that they drop into petite little feet even if they still match up.

Clothing/Armour:
The Sand Blossom
Starting from the bottom like always and working our way up with meet the outfit Sa-Sa greets the world with…and wow does it make all other Suna-nin look dull, ok yes it makes her stand out like a giant pink target but why should she care? IT LOOKS HELLA SPIFFY!!! We have what are called wrap zori to start off, the bottom slat is painted white wood and looks like a typical zori slat but that’s the last similarity as five pink straps come out of the slat and start wrapping around the leg in a variety of diagonal shapes that form a beltline all the way to the top of the shin. Here a leather white band wraps around the legs and all the pink straps disappear under it, likely sewn into the seam. Despite the unwieldy look as if it would take ages to put these on they actually stay rather stable and go on much in the same way boots do. Of course Sa-Sa has never been fond of leaving her legs terribly exposed so she wears white stockings that go from her feet to the mid-thigh area and stop just short of her upper dress.

This brings us to the upper dress which functions in three layers the first being the under layer which is a white kunoichis outfit with a pink line going around the waste and a short skirt that goes just far enough and leaves just a little bit exposed between where the skirt ends and the stockings begin. This part of the outfit is relatively unmentionable as it bears no specific markings or discernable differences from a typical kunochis battle outfit other than color. Of course it has short sleeves each which have a white felt belt wrapped around the ends to keep them tight to the skin, but after the next layer is added this is about the only part other than the skirt that can be seen as the front and back are covered by a contoured sand armor. For those who do not know what this is, it is also called priestess armor; it is pink (in her case) cloth with multiple levels, each filled with sand up her body. These layers stretch across in a horizontal fashion and each is sewn to the next with a small but noticeable black seam. It functions more like a vest though since there are white belts on the sides that pull the back and front together while when laid out it would look more like an oval with a single hole for the head in the center. These flaps drop to just above the butt allowing the white skirt to drop below. The third and final layer is not really a massive part of the outfit at all but it is important since its one of the stand out points of the outfit. A large white sash with purple Sakura blossoms wraps around her waist, under the outer most armor layer and drops to the side, this completely covers her left leg to the knee level and functions almost like a long half-skirt.

She wears two white gloves not all that dissimilar from those Kakashi wears, that is they cover the hands but the fingertips are removed and it has a piece of metal, painted pink, crossing over the top of the hand. These stretch about five inches past the wrist but no farther, however at this area she has two weapon holsters on each arm with Kunai and shuriken as well as a few explosive tags slipped into her right arms slot. These are rectangular pink boxes with a button stop to keep the weapons from pouring out, this is the only place Sa-Sa carries visible weapons as she seems to have none on her waist or main body. On top of her head is the most interesting item though; we find a beret, a pure white beret. This item she can almost always be spotted with, it seems to be of a felt and cotton nature, molding easily whichever way she wants. Thus you will typically find it slumping a bit to the left, which is traditional military style though she just does it because it looks good. Of course it isn’t just plain white, it seems she took the time to detach her head protector from its typical band and reapply it to a pink sash material, she then sewed it to the beret so that the sand symbol points forward. Thus in effect the beret actually functions as her headband; the excess of the pink sash comes to a knot in the back of the beret and falls to her shoulder area. Finally, she normally just lets her hair drop but occasionally can be seen with dual pig-tail style bows but more than likely if anything she strings a single long pink braid through her hair which ends in a big pink bon-bon, but again this is only on occasion.

Personality:
There are closet perverts, there are closet extroverts (there are skeletons in the closet ) and then there are closet geniuses. Sa-Sa is the latter in every shape of the concept, a ditsy little girl with the brain of grand strategist. This is not to say Sa-Sa hides her true self behind a visage, in fact she is what she seems, a careless and oftentimes very clumsy little dunce. To meet her in the streets, especially in a stricter village like Suna has often brought grown ups to the verge of tears knowing the precious village they have worked so hard to save will be in her generations hands one day. Indeed she might be over exaggerating her hyperactivity and jovial side just to get people to open up but to some extent this is her true self. A little bit of her intelligence can be seen though in the fact that though she does talk a lot she never talks about useless things, the topics she touches always apply to what’s happening in someway. Regardless those that do not know her and have no clue how she really thinks will likely be broken in half and on the brink of murder by the end of a short conversation with her because shes simply so energetic, bouncy and hyper in her speech. At times she also seems naïve, as if she doesn’t comprehend death and the other evils that plague the world but this really is a farce, she understands it just fine…it’s the kindness residing within her that only allows her to even think of such things in the most desperate of situations. Less important but equally notable character traits involve her love of hedgehogs, sakura blossoms and star fruit.

But of course all these things are surface facets of her personality, they are Sa-Sa’s outwards interpretation to the world but none of it is her core. That is something that can only be seen from within, even her perfect scores in academy, her skills with picking up any sort of genjutsu right off the bat and her abilities to create any sort of plan needed can’t truly begin to scratch the truth behind Sa-Sa’s intelligence. To top it off, believe it or not she does actually have a serious side and it actually comes out more often than you would think, she is dead serious in every battle she approaches except of course those with her teammates. As such you will find those she is partnered with tend to gain more respect for her as they experience more together, much as Akabane and Horoka her previous teammates did. This can be a bit odd because outsiders still can’t understand why they like her but its simply because as she gets to know people she is less ditsy and just fun instead, shes not some super slick killer or serious person underneath like some freaky two faced individuals but it does seem the clumsiness is a bit of an ice-breaker that is dropped once she knows you. At this point she is much more manageable and its possible to even consider her a good friend, especially when she saves your butt with one of her amazing plans, but that’s getting into battle tactics. So with that said, all hail the ditsy genius!

[Samurai Hatana]

{ It wouldn't all fit...so I had to make a seperate post }

History:
Sa-Sa’s life is not full of doom and gloom, it doesn’t have exciting moments or anything of particular interest like so many others but perhaps, if you come into it not expecting the destruction of an entire continent you might find a bit of charm in her tale of growing. The Desert Blossom was born on May 21 fifteen years ago, add a few days and did so as elegantly as she does everything else…that is to say she did it with much whining and complaining. Born to the Hatana “Clan” (Which was in fact, a single family, the only one left of the Clan. Not due to some evil history, they simply interbred out of the clan name eventually. Her father and mother will likely be the last since she is female) Sa-Sa’s life was pretty much a guaranteed free ride straight to death in the embrace of good money and a good life. For the Hatana are known throughout the Suna village for their grand treasure to the village, in the middle of the desert they have managed to nurture many Sakura (Cherry Blossoms) trees to maturity, a grand undertaking that has netted them a small fortune from rich men and higher-ups in the government. So from the day she was born she was pampered, the god of irony must have been smiling on her though for it would be these very trees that inspired her to take a less lackadaisical route through life.

Her early life went by without mention, save that I should say her father was a shinobi but rarely actually had jobs and instead took care of the sakura trees while her mother was a non-shinobi and was your typical housewife. Her father was allowed to do this simply because the money made off the trees not only benefited him but Suna’s economy as a whole and the Hatana grounds were seen as a sort of pride to Suna. Past her first few years, beginning at about four years old her father Shikitaru began teaching her how to care for the trees simply because she seemed obsessed with the brightly colored trees while her mother taught her typical housework. Her father always had contacts with the other shinobis though and Sa-Sa became rather interested in them, always asking the latest guest questions about what they did, her father always ran her off and apologized for her annoyance profusely but after a while he just had to give in and explain it to her. Of course like any young child who didn’t understand everything Sa-Sa immediately became convinced that’s what she wanted to do: “And I’ll be the prettiest shinobi around! Just like mommy says! Just like our trees!” she would say, her father simply humored her; little did he know was speaking the truth. Sa-Sa who was not one to give up loved her mother for doing her job, and didn’t particularly mind housework but early on she knew it bored her. Thus for the next year Sa-Sa bothered her father endlessly to teach her these magical shinobi arts which she had begun to understand the truth of after getting her hands on some basic children’s books about it. At first both parents refused to have anything to do with it, pushing how she didn’t have to do anything so drastic for they had more than enough money to support her. But for Sa-Sa it wasn’t about money, work or even proving herself, she simply wanted to do something different from that of her parents. Sa-Sas parents were not mean, nor were they the type to just pound their daughter’s ideas into dust and so after a while her father just gave in and began teaching her. He was a well built man but regardless when it came to the shinobi arts he specialized in genjutsu and so it was no surprise by the age of eight when the academy accepted her she knew enough genjutsu to put most other students to shame.

Upon entering the academy it became blatantly obvious she was smarter than she came off, her mother and fathers personalities had rubbed off on her and she was almost to kind but she also mastered most of the basic concepts in half the time it took most as well as scoring perfect scores on all but the physical taijutsu test. Many of her academy teachers tried to pull the overzealous goofiness out of her, figuring if they could get her to harness her inner intelligence and skill she would be the perfect shinobi but unfortunately for them it was a wasted effort, she would forever be the ditsy genius. Regardless of her attitude though one does not fail a child with the potential she had and so to her mother and fathers great surprise she succeeded in becoming a genin. From there she joined her first team, which consisted of the harsh but intelligent former ANBU Obito and two of her classmates, Retsu Akabane and Horana Horoka. This was a real wake up call for Sa-Sa for Obito was a d**n communist compared to her former teachers, regularly beating training concepts into his students forcibly, Akabane was off-kilter for he wasn’t outright cold and at times even seemed jovial but it was all a sham to cover the trained killer his parents had worked all their lives to make out of him and finnaly Haroka, though nothing was inherently wrong with him did despise Sa-Sa because he had always trained to be extremely powerful and resented this little girl with no real physical capabilities for outdoing him in the academy. Regardless they somehow managed not to kill each other and amazingly through Obito’s teachings actually wound up trusting each other and working as a team, Akabane in particular who had always seemed so distant took a particular liking to Sa-Sa over time. They had been particularly lucky in getting Obito though they might not have realized it for he not only understood the human psyche resulting in them getting along but he was also a master of almost all techniques, he helped Sa-Sa put many of her genjutsu together, he made Akabane a perfect applicant for the ANBU someday and turned Haroka into a crushing titan of a fighter. Thus several years after their initial paring Obito finally suggested the trio for the Chuunin exams, that was one year ago, Sa-Sa was fourteen.

Several interesting events happened at the chuunin exams (involving jutsu creation which can be found in the jutsu section) but the real point was the exam itself. The first exam had been a sham but Sa-Sa and Akabane would have had no problems passing anyway and Haroka would have pulled through somehow, he might not have been the smartest shinobi running around but he wasn’t a big dim bulb like some either. Then came the Chuunin Survival Exam involving capturing a scroll opposite the one you had, Team Obito got Earth. This had not been as hard as it was for some, team Obito was a perfect grouping with Sa-Sa on genjutsu, Akabane on ninjutsu and stealth and rounding out with Haroka on taijutsu, they were prepared for just about any situation. They proved it to with little standing in their way though that might have been pure luck in getting the Heaven scroll from the very first and only team they ran into, then booking it straight to the tower only dealing with a few ferocious beast along the way. Thus they arrived in the second day and after a little waiting they were brought into a large room, turned out that by the third day all other teams left in the survival grounds had either been defeated or thrown in the towel, that didn’t make it easy though for quite a few had still passed but it did insure no prelim events were required. After being informed of having a month the team returned to Suna whereupon they began vicious training with Obito, developing several of their primary jutsus, such as Sa-Sa who had been learning to manipulate all her opponents senses finishing several of her high end mind altering techniques. There was really nothing unexpected occurring during this time, Obito told Sa-Sa not to worry about the summons and to not attempt to use it, that he would train her in that later. Thus they headed back to the exam grounds and the third and final exam began…and ended rather promptly for our young heroine. Her very first opponent was an Aburame and though she did succeed in putting him under several genjutsus she didn’t know much about their bloodline and when she noticed herself about to pass out from chakra deprivation, finally seeing the bugs she screamed and ran around for a little bit screaming something along the lines of “EW BUGS BUGS!!! GROSSSSSSSS!!!!! BUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUGGGGGGSSSSSSS!!!!” …and then she fainted.

It had been a case of a poor match up for even if she hadn’t freaked out about the bugs her genjutsus still would have been all but useless against the Aburame bloodline but this fact resulted in her being promptly turned down for any chance at Chuunin. Her two teammates weren’t so unlucky, Akabane was passed out of the sheer brilliance of his tactics while Haroka got the green light after ripping a hole through his opponents straight to the finals, where he unfortunately lost to…no surprise, a Hyuuga. At first Sa-Sa hadn’t been to bothered by this, even if she had wanted to succeed she was glad for her teammates but when Akabane was pulled from the team and disappeared into the ANBU followed shortly after by Haroka who was put on guardian duty she became deeply depressed. Sure she still had Obito-sensei and she saw the other two occasionally but it just wasn’t the same, especially when she had nothing of her own to do except wait around practicing her jutsus like a little kid. During this time Obito helped teach her the basics of summoning though it seemed more to try and cheer his student up than to really help, she did indeed take the lessons to heart and becoming a decent summoner rather quickly but it still wasn’t the same. Then the worst thing possible happened, Obito was recalled to operate in the ANBU again and this left Sa-Sa all alone, sure Obito made sure to get the three together once a week to talk but Sa-Sa knew the moment they left they went back to work while she went back home and sat staring out her window. The irony god struck again in her life because from this situation she drew one of her most powerful genjutsus for even in her depression she still wanted to succeed in her life as a shinobi. Then one day Obito came to her with some news, a new round of academy students had just been passed and this time there had been enough time to get her put in one, as he put it “Sure they are younger and less experienced but its your chance to succeed again.” Perhaps it was all that Sa-Sa needed, maybe it wasn’t her friends she missed because she still saw them but rather the chance to succeed even if that hadn’t been her initial motive for the old Sa-Sa was back and she was ready to make some little nubile children hate her in all her goofy glory. Long live the ditsy genius, her story starts again!

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Companions
Obito-sensei
Sa-Sas old Sensei and a master of all the shinobi arts from brutal strength to cunning illusions. Obito is a prior ANBU (and has now returned to being one) with strict policies and training methods but excellent results. Despite his harsh demeanor he became quite fond of his team over the years and helped them overcome their own problems to become one of the most effective teams around. He is the one who orchestrates a meeting between the four once a week to eat lunch or whatever they might be feeling like just so that they all get to see friendly faces every once in a while as they progress through their new lives.

Retsu Akabane
Akabane is one of Sa-Sa’s two initial teammates. When he first joined in he was an odd one, he always seemed happy but lurking beneath was the cold soul of a killer as his parents, two assassin ANBU had personally crafted. Akabanes skills never really changed and he still went on to become an ANBU after passing the Chuunin exam but he was a different person by that time after his years with the other two. He was more open, and friendly even if others thought he was a bit odd and was always a genius but now shared his thoughts with others rather than thinking himself better. In particular he’s come to care for Sa-Sa deeply though he still covers his emotions enough that only he is aware of this.

Horana Horoka
The other team member of Team Obito and the slugger of the group. When Horoka first joined the group Akabane annoyed him with his personality and he hated Sa-Sa for being better than him in school even if she wasn’t the better fighter. Through time and Obito-senseis words though they all came to accept each other and he in particular got over his grudges, nowadays he is quiet the jovial little man and a real joker when around his friends. After pummeling his way to the finals during the chuunin exam Horoka became a Chuunin Guardian and like Akabane only sees Sa-Sa and the rest of his team on the once a week occasion Obito gets them together for.

Boka-Boka-Ichimoka-San
Sa-Sa’s pet hedgehog, he stays home most of the time meaning he’s really more of her mothers pet but that doesn’t mean she doesn’t love the little thing to death. There’s nothing really special to say about him…he’s a hedgehog.

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Battle Style
As is obvious Sa-Sas battle style revolves almost entirely around affecting her target with genjutsu and then either taking them out physically or through long distance means. Of course her style is even better suited to helping her teammates get in close since chances are they are a hundred times better at disposing with the enemy. She does however possess a good array of quick and precise taijutsu movements though not particularly powerful, she also uses some ninjutsu. Sa-Sa is renowned in her year of passing genins for having the largest supply of chakra which comes in handy for providing constant genjutsu backup.

Genjutsu: Like I said, her strength and it shows, there are few shinobi at her level that can utilize genjutsu at her caliber, a few of her strong genjutsu techniques could be said to surpass even a good few chuunin. She is a master of the art and despite failing her chuunin exam has drawn many eyes with her ability to draw just about any level opponent into a jutsu and hold them there as well as her ability to modify her genjutsu on the fly. Sa-Sa tends to make new genjutsu like bunnies reproduce, she just has so many great ideas that not a week goes by that she doesn’t propose a new idea to try out to herself. Most of her skills are used to make her physical capabilities more effective but several of her stronger maneuvers are used to hold the target stationary for a long time or until one of her teammates is capable of getting in and making a fatal blow.

Ninjutsu: This is Sa-Sas weak point, she has shown some capability with fire based ninjutsu since learning to summon but that’s about it. Of course that can be important, as when thrown into conjunction with her genjutsu a fireball to the head is much stronger than a punch. Regardless nobody should rely on Sa-Sa to provide long-range ninjutsu backup because it just won’t come. Regardless with her ability to pickup on most jutsus it isn’t far fetched to say she could probably become dangerous with ninjutsu given some time, especially with having already picked up the fire property.

Taijutsu: I have made it sound as though Sa-Sa is a terrible taijutsu user but this is not completely true. While she certainly is not a juggernaut of power or the ultimate end all taijutsu combatant she can hold her own in a fight. She is fast and acrobatic, plus as always augmented with her genjutsu it becomes that much more effective. You will note most of Sa-Sas techniques use her legs, this is quite simply because that’s where the power is, she doesn’t have much strength in her arms despite working them out into seals constantly. In short, one shouldn’t rely on Sa-Sa to fight it out directly with an opponent but neither should they underestimate her ability to break it down when the need arises.

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Weapons
Kunai
A kunai is a wrought iron weapons that can be used in conjunction with many different things. Generally, they are the cheapest of a shinobi's weapons and range in size depending on the person's preference. The edge of this weapon is usually not polished to a sharp point, but left somewhat dull. It can best be described as a leaf shaped weapon with a handle that has a ring at the end of it. A kunai can be simply thrown, have wire attached to it, or it can be used as an anchor, as a stabbing weapon, or something like an exploding note can be wrapped around it and thrown. Sa-Sa carries ten on each arm held in rectangular pink holsters strapped to her upper wrist.

Shuriken
A Shuriken is a small hidden weapon that takes on the appearance of what can be described as a four pointed star. They, like a kunai, are a common shinobi tool, and are often made from metal. They are small and can be hidden within the users hand, hence the concealed part of it. They usually play a small role in a shinobi's fighting style, and are more a supplemental weapon. They are often thrown and can be used in partnership with jutsu to conceal their coming. Shuriken can be thrown for distraction, embedded in the ground or used as a carrier for other things, such as a fuse to start a fire or coated with poison. There are two pink rectangular boxes on each arm, one carries kunai, the other Shuriken so she can drawn them from either side. She carries roughly sixty, split evenly between the two boxes.

Exploding Note
An exploding note is a fairly common shinobi tool also. It is a piece of parchment that has writing upon its surface. This script serves the purpose of bringing forth the explosive properties of the note. Generally, exploding notes are attached to another object like a tree, rock, or house, or are wrapped around weapons such as the handle of a kunai. The script allows the paper to burn at a slow rate which will allow the user to escape before the explosion occurs. She inserts three inside the holsters on each arms, set inside the kunai holsters so she can draw them immediately if needed.

[Tensei Kaori]

Could you please edit the formatting of your posts' text alignment and font size back to the board default? It will make your bio alot easier to read, which will result in quicker responses from the Staff.

It looks to me like you have a character who, though a Genin, has the abilities of a novice Chuunin, correct? I'm willing to give you that considering your character's history, provided you can guarantee that you'll be realistic and will keep it in check. However, a shinobi of Genin-Chuunin level won't be a true master in any given field yet; not even all Jounin can be said to have truly "mastered" any particular area of the shinobi arts. If you can guarantee to me that you'll keep your character's abilities in check and not go overboard with things - Genjutsu especially - and if the other Staff have no objections, I can go ahead and approve this. It's nothing personal, I'm just making sure we're both on the same page as far as your character's strength and abilities go. Until then, though, I'm going to refrain from saying anything one way or the other.

Also, for future reference - and this is meant as nothing more than a friendly suggestion, as I can get long-winded more readily than most - please try and keep things a little more concise. We'll all love you for it.

[Kiri]

I don't even know if I approve this; I have yet to get through the whole thing. I'll try to read it again later. Detail is good, but I feel like someone's been holding my head underwater.

Sorry. I don't mean to be rude. It's just unbelievably long and I'm very tired. I will read it later and deliver a verdict. Hopefully after you've followed K-chan's advice on the formatting.

[Hatake Hiroshi]

Wow. That's a really long bio... I'm going to have to agree with K-Chan on the formatting and length. Formatting will make it a whole lot easier for the rest of the Staff to read, as will shortening it. I got lost at a few parts, but overall, it was a good bio. It was well-written, and I can tell you put a lot of thought into it. Unfortunately, I have a few issues, but nothing a little bit of tweaking can't fix. So no worries.

First, as far as her last name goes, Japanese names/words are spelled phonetically, so changing the pronunciation of the name without changing the spelling of the word doesn't make any sense. So, if you wanted to keep it with the meaning you've created, you could change the name to “Samurei.”

Secondly, I don't mean to sound rude or harsh, but the genius thing is a bit iffy for me. Everyone seems to love creating genius characters, and to be honest, it's a tad unoriginal and uncreative. A character that's just really smart or quick on their toes is a lot more fun to interact with than one that seems to be a master in just about everything.

Lastly, I'm going to have to say no to all the genjutsu and the genjutsu mastery. Having her be so experienced in genjutsu at the age of 8 is really pushing it, and the level she is at currently...

sei said:

Genjutsu: Like I said, her strength and it shows, there are few shinobi at her level that can utilize genjutsu at her caliber, a few of her strong genjutsu techniques could be said to surpass even a good few chuunin. She is a master of the art and despite failing her chuunin exam has drawn many eyes with her ability to draw just about any level opponent into a jutsu and hold them there as well as her ability to modify her genjutsu on the fly.

This is way too much. She wouldn't be able to be at this level until she was an experienced Jounin. And even then, it's just like K-Chan said... Even Jounin can't always claim to be "masters" in any particular shinobi art. I'm sorry, but you're going to get an unapproved from me as far as her fighting and jutsu go. You're going to have to tone it down to a more realistic level before I can feel comfortable approving it.

[Kiri]

hatakehiroshi said:

First, as far as her last name goes, Japanese names/words are spelled phonetically, so changing the pronunciation of the name without changing the spelling of the word doesn't make any sense. So, if you wanted to keep it with the meaning you've created, you could change the name to “Samurei.”

Wouldn't it have to be "Samerei" or "Sameirei"? Phonetically speaking. I don't know about the meaning.

Oh yeah. I also know it was stated a few times throughout the bio, but do you think you could add "Sand" or "Sand Village" plainly somewhere? Like in the title, or perhaps early on in the bio.