Kazuma Hasegawa~Hidden Leaf~

[Kazuma Hasegawa(Moon and Sun)]

Name:

Kazuma Hasegawa

Age:

8

Gender:

Male

Rank:

Genin

Appearance:

Kazuma is a 4"7' slim cut person with a tanned flexible body and a slim small figure,his eyes emerald green eyes but big pupils and eye lids,he has hazel colored hair bowl shaped but spiky with two big strands of hair in the middle of the fold between the hair. He also has a small mouth and medium sized ears and a small x-shaped scar on his left cheek. His body is skinny and slim he has small body but cut that some jounin are boggled about,his lower body is also cut his abs showing a four pack his extensive body and firmness from his training as well. His arms go towards his waist the slimmest part of his body because of its slim nature and strong build wearing a belt over his pants and also with his strong warm and powerful legs muscular but small as a athletes and also built to withstand attacks towards the legs easily.

He wears his head band on the belt as he always does and also wears a black tank-top and wears bandages on his neck as well as his arms and on his hands wrapped tightly and securely.with this he wears a sash on the bottom of his waist and his belt of course the sash being green and also his belt is black as well. He also wears long pants at which they are rolled up towards the top of his ankles. His feet he wears brown sandals with two rectangular opposite placed to actually help him keep his balance. He wears weights on his arms to help him with his direct thrust and also on his stomach to help strengthen his balance.

Personality: Kazuma is serious but calm,quiet but agile,and also concentrated but precise, He has a serious tone and style utilizing his focus towards it he is also very calm and quiet rarely talking unless talked to by a higher rank or he is formatted to explain techniques that he used in battles like how his opponents died and how he used the technique he does. He is no slouch in ninjutsu or genjutsu as well he just exceeds in Kenjutsu is all able to perform hand seals at a fast rate and deliver power techniques of daze through genjutsu. His agility comes from his ways of training towards becoming faster and is also able to do the shadow clone technique due towards his Moon Dancer Style needs it and utilizes a quick hand in fighting. He also always concentrates never being the one to be outwitted by anyone unless of course Jounin Level or High Chunin level with much strong striking and completely boggling them with the Moon Dancers style.

History:

Kazuma was born to be a ninja crafted by the blades,he was born on the day of January the 3rd as a young but cute baby. After experiencing tastes and using his sight Kazuma had seen the blades of Ninja and Kunoichi alike and instantly wanted one to use in battle. This would be evident at the ripe age of 3 years old going on 4 years for him his father saw him touching and playing with swords swinging it as if he was a baseball player around the house also cutting through walls and also once a table. This landed him in big trouble but ultimately his father was also a carrier of the sword and also a master,with this his training had begun after the week of punishment he had. Kazuma learned to focus he already knew how to just not knowing how to thrust or attack with a sword because his mind was still a little undeveloped. During his training his father had hinted that he was making extremely quick progress able to thrust his sword towards a dummy and cut it at half at the age of 5,his father was astonished at such progress he knew that with this training he could be a true learner of the Moon and Sun Dancer Style. The first and easier style he would teach him would and is still teaching him is the Moon Style as of now making him utilize Ninjutsu with ease and also teaching him a few techniques out of the Kenjutsu style.

Through his academy years he was also only focused on school and never on anything else as stupid as rivalries just his training his parents and himself getting stronger,his teachers saw amazing progress though he was only there for 3 years(Entering at 5 years old.) Kazuma was put through one more test facing off against a genin before he had left this was unannounced to him and unknowing his quick movements and precise sword strokes devastated the genin and he was only using a wooden sword as of now. After this test he had passed for genin still training and not letting the achievement go towards his head he underwent even harder training utilizing weights and progressing through them without question. His dream became evident towards his own graduation day after a small speech saying that he would become the greatest blade dancer to ever grace Konohagakure's presence by having his name planted as one of the best.

Optional Statistics:

Blood Type: O

Birth:January 3rd

Likes: Swords and also Training To be a Swordsman

Dislikes: Arrogance,Idiots,Stupidity and Excuses

[Hatake Hiroshi]

Alright! Sorry it's taken so long to get back to you on this.
A good deal of stuff in your bio is getting a unapproved from me, but I've gone through and listed what you need to change.

Age and Rank: Having an 8-year-old genin is a no-go. Either bump your age up to a more realistic one, or bump your rank down to Academy Student.

Appearance: Everything seems fine, except one thing. Your character's age doesn't really fit their body type. An 8-year-old, or even normal genin (age 11+) isn't going to have a cut body... unless they're super-human... or on steroids. Please be more realistic.

Personality: Your personality sounds pretty good, though I don't understand why you included your character's jutsu and fighting style in there. You should put that in a different section. But, since we're on that topic...

You're character's abilities are a bit on the god-moddish side. A genin is not going to be that experienced in three different styles, nor are they going to be very proficient in anything. Genin are the lowest ranking shinobi, for the most part fresh out of there Academy. They aren't going to be outwitting most everyone else, or boggling almost everyone with their own technique. Yes, some of us have characters that have created their own tecniques at the Academy Student-Genin level, but are far from being masters.
As far as your technique goes, I can't make any assumptions about it, though, it does sound a tad goddish... especially when you include that your character knows Kage Bunshin, which is a no. No Kage Bunshin. Period.
If you could, please write out a thorough description of your technique(s), post them in the Jutsu Board for approval, and we'll get back to you on it.

History: You're going to have to rework this some... A 3-year-old is not going to be able to slice through walls and tables, much less even be able to pick up a sword, and a 5-year-old isn't going to be able to slice a dummy in half. It's just not realistic. We'd also prefer that your character spend longer in the Academy. While graduating a year early or so would be ok, it'd be better if they endured the Academy for a good 6 or 7 years (age 5-12).

On another note, you can move your character's bloodtype and birthday up to where you have your name, age, rank, etc... and put your likes and dislikes under your personality. That would help make your bio look more organized. Also, all the bold font is difficult to read. Just format the little headers like "Appearance," "Personality," and "History," etc...

Thank you!